PostPosted:Fri Apr 19, 2013 2:21 am
Yoshimatsu wrote:Whipped this up in 5 minutes.LIEZ! HOW CAN YOU MAKE SOMETHING SO GREAT IN FIVE MINUTES!?!??!
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PostPosted:Fri Apr 19, 2013 3:52 pm
ummmm, because it's true?
Anyway, here's the newest one.
Submission:
Evil feelings of doubt and despair
keep me crawling and gasping for air
The voices saying "Don't give in!"
make it seem easy to get rid of this sin
In reality I don't agree
with what my mind is doing to me
the stress of life bringing me down
and hands violence the crown
I wish to never sway
off the path, from my way
but built up anger is a curse
one that will damage me... or worse
My rebellion seems in vain
because against my anger I've nothing to gain
Now it's treason I commit
by being forced to submit
After all of this I see
The only thing in the way is me
and when anger seems to be the only way
I must find the strength to disobey
Anyway, here's the newest one.
Submission:
Evil feelings of doubt and despair
keep me crawling and gasping for air
The voices saying "Don't give in!"
make it seem easy to get rid of this sin
In reality I don't agree
with what my mind is doing to me
the stress of life bringing me down
and hands violence the crown
I wish to never sway
off the path, from my way
but built up anger is a curse
one that will damage me... or worse
My rebellion seems in vain
because against my anger I've nothing to gain
Now it's treason I commit
by being forced to submit
After all of this I see
The only thing in the way is me
and when anger seems to be the only way
I must find the strength to disobey
PostPosted:Wed Apr 24, 2013 6:43 pm
Figured I'd take a turn from the darkness for a second.
Love is...:
Love is a bond, an oath with a friend
to be there through hardship and more
Love is being there to the bitter end
with the one you adore
Love can be blind
with a true form hard to find
yet assuredly to it you will bind
until your entire heart is lined
Love is a soft head on your shoulder
and having the will to stay there and hold her
It's that outstanding bliss
that comes from a lover's kiss
Love is being willing to say how you're feeling
but being there as the hourglass drains of sand
Love is the time when life sends you reeling
but you can still hold her hand
Love is...:
Love is a bond, an oath with a friend
to be there through hardship and more
Love is being there to the bitter end
with the one you adore
Love can be blind
with a true form hard to find
yet assuredly to it you will bind
until your entire heart is lined
Love is a soft head on your shoulder
and having the will to stay there and hold her
It's that outstanding bliss
that comes from a lover's kiss
Love is being willing to say how you're feeling
but being there as the hourglass drains of sand
Love is the time when life sends you reeling
but you can still hold her hand
PostPosted:Thu Apr 25, 2013 12:30 am
*Hits like button!*
PostPosted:Thu Apr 25, 2013 2:32 am
Yeah, felt I had to switch it up, this topic was getting darker fast
PostPosted:Thu Apr 25, 2013 2:38 am
Wow yoshi these are great because i truly feel THROUGH these words, they almost map out some of the times of my life so far, light and dark 
PostPosted:Thu Apr 25, 2013 3:06 am
Philosopher wrote:Wow yoshi these are great because i truly feel THROUGH these words, they almost map out some of the times of my life so far, light and darkthanks bro! means a lot!
PostPosted:Thu Apr 25, 2013 4:01 am
Np dude.
PostPosted:Mon Apr 29, 2013 4:08 pm
Got another one. Took a little longer than that other one... Let me know what you think:
Sorrow's Bane:
Pages of sorrows deep
Writings of pain
Open wounds that still seep
When the hurt starts its reign
But when love shows its face
There's nothing else to embrace
Sewing seeds of the dark
Black ink flows on the lines
With every grim remark
The seeds grow into vines
But Love is the one who cared
Even when the vines ensnared
Winds blow the pages foreword
Winds of sorrow, winds of pain
Making it easy to find a sore word
While I'm wandering, lost in the rain
Knowing Love I'll find
helps to ease my mind
And though depression hurts
It will rush like a wave, and move past
No cures in women, sensually clad in mini-skirts
That life will not last
Can't find it in violence or alcohol, there must be more
And now I see that Love's opened the door
Lies whispered in each ear
Cling to my soul and start to tear
Which command do I choose to hear
Which uniform do I choose to wear
It is truth Love speaks
And hearing it fixes my heart's leaks
So just remember...
As sorrows gain
And life brings pain
Then leaves you in the rain
And all seems in vein
Even if it begins to strain...
That when it's love you attain
It seizes domain
And begins to reign
Finally becoming Sorrow's Bane
Sorrow's Bane:
Pages of sorrows deep
Writings of pain
Open wounds that still seep
When the hurt starts its reign
But when love shows its face
There's nothing else to embrace
Sewing seeds of the dark
Black ink flows on the lines
With every grim remark
The seeds grow into vines
But Love is the one who cared
Even when the vines ensnared
Winds blow the pages foreword
Winds of sorrow, winds of pain
Making it easy to find a sore word
While I'm wandering, lost in the rain
Knowing Love I'll find
helps to ease my mind
And though depression hurts
It will rush like a wave, and move past
No cures in women, sensually clad in mini-skirts
That life will not last
Can't find it in violence or alcohol, there must be more
And now I see that Love's opened the door
Lies whispered in each ear
Cling to my soul and start to tear
Which command do I choose to hear
Which uniform do I choose to wear
It is truth Love speaks
And hearing it fixes my heart's leaks
So just remember...
As sorrows gain
And life brings pain
Then leaves you in the rain
And all seems in vein
Even if it begins to strain...
That when it's love you attain
It seizes domain
And begins to reign
Finally becoming Sorrow's Bane
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PostPosted:Mon Apr 29, 2013 5:10 pm
^ totally relevant double post there jato
PostPosted:Mon Apr 29, 2013 5:13 pm
All ur posts aee belong to us. Or maybe thats my dpuble stamp of approval? O.o
PostPosted:Mon Apr 29, 2013 5:23 pm
VERY nice writing Yoshi, Brought much happiness and emotion to read your words here! I appreciate the effort and creativeness in your thoughts! I have a new respect for you!
PostPosted:Mon Apr 29, 2013 8:15 pm
tac.smart wrote:VERY nice writing Yoshi, Brought much happiness and emotion to read your words here!^
PostPosted:Mon Apr 29, 2013 10:43 pm
Gollum wrote:^ loltac.smart wrote:VERY nice writing Yoshi, Brought much happiness and emotion to read your words here!^
PostPosted:Mon Apr 29, 2013 11:15 pm
Philosopher wrote:What's funny? Did I miss something?Gollum wrote:^ loltac.smart wrote:VERY nice writing Yoshi, Brought much happiness and emotion to read your words here!^
PostPosted:Mon Apr 29, 2013 11:17 pm
Philosopher wrote:What's funny? Did I miss something?Gollum wrote:^ loltac.smart wrote:VERY nice writing Yoshi, Brought much happiness and emotion to read your words here!^
PostPosted:Mon Apr 29, 2013 11:55 pm
Jato wrote:U missed my addition to his poem
PostPosted:Tue Apr 30, 2013 2:15 am
No i saw that one lol laughed for like 5 minutes too
PostPosted:Tue Apr 30, 2013 2:50 am
Mission accomplished lol
PostPosted:Tue Apr 30, 2013 3:52 am
Here's another. Had it written, just didn't want to share I at the time.
Unresolved:
What a strange place I'm in
Caught up in an undertow
From a wave of half-repented sin
That I'm trying so desperately to overthrow
I'm lost, I can't find my way
It's a problem my poems can't fix
For as my soul yearns for God this day
The rest of me shouts 666
"He's lazy!"
"He's a liar!"
"He does everything
Every little desire"
My mind is growing hazy
To stop me from going crazy
End it all, send me higher
There are times I long for death to come and whisk me away
Other times I try myself, what good am I anyway???
Yet still there are moments where God says, "It's not time to meet yet
So stay, fulfill your calling, and most of all, never fret"
So I'm sorry to those it would hurt
To see me buried in 6 feet of dirt
I just can't live a lie
But clearly the solution isn't to die...
Unresolved:
What a strange place I'm in
Caught up in an undertow
From a wave of half-repented sin
That I'm trying so desperately to overthrow
I'm lost, I can't find my way
It's a problem my poems can't fix
For as my soul yearns for God this day
The rest of me shouts 666
"He's lazy!"
"He's a liar!"
"He does everything
Every little desire"
My mind is growing hazy
To stop me from going crazy
End it all, send me higher
There are times I long for death to come and whisk me away
Other times I try myself, what good am I anyway???
Yet still there are moments where God says, "It's not time to meet yet
So stay, fulfill your calling, and most of all, never fret"
So I'm sorry to those it would hurt
To see me buried in 6 feet of dirt
I just can't live a lie
But clearly the solution isn't to die...
PostPosted:Tue Apr 30, 2013 4:03 am
Brilliant writing. Often poets such as yourself use connections from their personal lives. And through your tone, word choice, and execution I can tell that you relate to what you write. Once again very good job. Some people may need to hear these words once and awhile so plz make many more!
PostPosted:Tue Apr 30, 2013 4:30 am
aka like!
PostPosted:Tue Apr 30, 2013 4:35 am
Lol jato