Knights Reborn

Ok, im trying to make a very neat invitation text which i can use to invite people into the ogame alliance named Shinra Corp...

My english sux, so i was wondering if any1 knew any good (short/long) invitation forms i could borrow and use? Neat and "complicated" english word appreciated! (im sure fluffy knows some =P )



This is what -I- was able to ... make just now.
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Subject:

-Invitation-

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Text:

Greetings.

Shinra Corp. Alliance is looking for new members with a Strong sence of dedication to the game. We are looking for support and influence among other Alliances aswell as players.

If you are interested, or/and want more information about this alliance, you can visit us at our forum (http://shincorp.proboards61.com)
or you can PM me ingame.

Alliance: Shinra Corp.
Tag: ShinCorp

//Akimoto - Shinra Corp Diplomat and Founder
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Any help appreciated!

Looks nice Aki

Although this sentence:

vissit us in our forum

Should be:

visit us at our forum

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Pho~

Akimoto wrote: strong sence of dedication to ogame.

Strong Sense of dedication to the game.

wow look a spelling bee how do you spell... no just kidding looks good

lol tnx, i've edited it - anything more i could add, should add? Hmm...

sure how about this


join us or die!!


or what the hot newb paris hilton say's ...''that's hot'' XD

RoNin wrote:

Akimoto wrote: strong sence of dedication to ogame.

Strong Sense of dedication to the game.

Ogame is the name of the game. Its an "ogame" alliance.

Phoenix wrote:

RoNin wrote:

Akimoto wrote: strong sence of dedication to ogame.

Strong Sense of dedication to the game.

Ogame is the name of the game. Its an "ogame" alliance.

Edited the invite post.

And I think it's done and ...no more room for improvements (max 500 letters)

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