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The story of Evil Bespin Officer!!

PostPosted:Sun Nov 25, 2007 3:14 am
by Greed
I was exploring the anarchy on the distant planet of tatooine. It was for a mission. I had to stop a few major criminals hidden on this planet. I had two of my buddies traveling with me. One was in my holster and the other inside a gold embedded hilt. I was sitting in seclusion in the bar on Mos Espa. I was dressed in my Jedi robe with the hood covering my eyes. I was told that they were near Mos Espa and had a warrant of 60,000 credits on their head.
I was glancing around when a rodian quickly rushed in and yelled some kind of alarm in Huttese! Everyone rushed outside, including me, to find a couple of humans torturing some jawa salesmen. One of them was tall, bald and had a scar down his right arm with a blaster pistol and the other wasnt as tall and had atrench coat covering most of his body with a giant blade in his hand. The bald one picked up the jawa by the neck and calmly said, "Give us all those credits inside that bag." The jawa started to struggle as he gasped for air. He tried to yell for help but before he could do that he was swiftly thrown on the ground and kicked at a wall."I will only ask this once,"said the tall one,"give us those credits." The jawa refused but before he could even shake his head he was shot in the forehead! The one with the trench coat walked up to the jawa trying to run away with the credits and carelessly swung his sword. The jawas head slowly toppled off of the body and the bag fell to the floor.
As soon as i realized that these were the people i was looking for I pulled out my pistol to try to capture them them. They saw it coming. They spotted a rodian getting inside a speeder. The one with the blade sped towards him and kicked him right off of the speeder! The taller one jumped into the speeder with the credits in his hand and they sped away as the civilians watched in terror.

{end of Prologue}

PostPosted:Tue Feb 26, 2008 8:31 pm
by Greed
So.... I guess u think my story sux... :cry: :cry: :cry:

PostPosted:Wed Feb 27, 2008 12:05 am
by Kyuubi
it's good :D poor jawa :(

PostPosted:Wed Feb 27, 2008 1:12 am
by BadWolf
good start

PostPosted:Wed Feb 27, 2008 12:33 pm
by Wolferion
It's a good start =) Keep it going.

PostPosted:Wed Feb 27, 2008 8:10 pm
by Greed
Well the thing is I'm a cartoonist... not an author.... my story isnt nearly as good as it would be if i made it a comic book instead but i dont have that kind of time.... I guess I'll do my best to keep it going! Thx all u! :D

PostPosted:Thu Feb 28, 2008 2:30 am
by Kakashi.Archive
Sorry i didnt see this before =o pho needs to make it into a sticky hehe ^^

Good so far keep it up, also if your a cartoonist why dont u make pictures for it? its not hard to get them on the internet or anything ^^

PostPosted:Thu Feb 28, 2008 7:49 pm
by Greed
Ya good point kak I'll try some illustrations...

BTW.. thx for making this a sticky